Evaluation Report for General Writing Task 2 Agree/Disagree Essay Submission
Essay Evaluation
Question: It is commonly believed that individuals should take personal responsibility for reducing pollution by making conscious lifestyle choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Use specific examples to support your position.
It is irrifutable that pollution becoming a major problem at glob level. Some people think that reducing pollution is only responsiblity of individual by their simple lifestyle. I disagree with this notion and i will give some releted example to support my opinion.
To begin with,
To begin with,
Submitted on March 19, 2024 at 1:03 PM
Overall Evaluation
4.5 Bands
Your essay addresses the question by stating a clear position of disagreement with the idea that individuals alone are responsible for reducing pollution. However, there are several areas for improvement. Firstly, your introduction contains grammatical errors and could be more engaging by providing a broader context or a stronger thesis statement. For instance, 'irrefutable' is misspelled as 'irrifutable', and 'glob level' should be 'global level'. Additionally, the phrase 'simple lifestyle' could be expanded to specify what kinds of lifestyle changes are being discussed. Your argument would benefit greatly from more detailed examples and a deeper analysis of why you believe individual actions are not sufficient to reduce pollution. Consider incorporating statistics, studies, or specific instances where collective action or policy changes have led to significant environmental improvements. Moreover, the structure of your essay could be enhanced by clearer paragraphing and a more distinct separation of your main points. Lastly, paying attention to spelling, punctuation, and grammar will help increase the clarity and professionalism of your writing. Enhancing these aspects will make your argument more persuasive and improve the overall quality of your essay.
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4.5
Coherence & Cohesion
4.5 Bands
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Logical Organization
Your essay lacks a clear structure and idea flow, which is crucial for the reader to follow your argument effectively. The introduction of examples and counterarguments appears abrupt without a smooth transition between them. Band: 4.0
Bad Sentence(s)
It is irrifutable that pollution becoming a major problem at glob level.
Corrected Sentence:
It is irrefutable that pollution is becoming a major problem at a global level.
It is irrefutable that pollution is becoming a major problem at a global level.
Clarify your statement and correct grammatical errors.
Some people think that reducing pollution is only responsiblity of individual by their simple lifestyle.
Corrected Sentence:
Some people believe that reducing pollution is solely the responsibility of individuals through their lifestyle choices.
Some people believe that reducing pollution is solely the responsibility of individuals through their lifestyle choices.
Correct the spelling mistake and improve clarity.
Suggestions
To enhance logical progression, start with a clear thesis statement. Organize your essay into paragraphs with distinct themes: introduction, arguments against the statement with examples, your viewpoint, and a conclusion. Use transition words to connect ideas.
Paragraphing
Your paragraphs are not clearly defined, making it hard to distinguish between different sections of your argument. Band: 4.0
Bad Sentence(s)
I disagree with this notion and i will give some releted example to support my opinion.
Corrected Sentence:
I disagree with this notion and will provide some related examples to support my opinion.
I disagree with this notion and will provide some related examples to support my opinion.
Start a new paragraph for your argument and correct spelling errors.
Suggestions
Focus on creating distinct paragraphs for each section of your essay. Each paragraph should start with a topic sentence that introduces the main idea, followed by supporting sentences and a concluding sentence.
Cohesive Devices
Your essay shows an attempt to use cohesive devices, but they are often used incorrectly or are too basic, which affects the overall coherence. Band: 4.0
Bad Sentence(s)
To begin with,
Corrected Sentence:
To begin with, it is essential to consider the role of governments and large corporations in pollution control.
To begin with, it is essential to consider the role of governments and large corporations in pollution control.
Use this phrase to introduce the first point in a new paragraph, followed by a detailed explanation or example.
Suggestions
Improve your use of cohesive devices by incorporating a variety of transition words and phrases that accurately reflect the relationship between ideas, such as 'furthermore' for adding information, 'however' for contrasting, and 'therefore' for concluding. Practice using these in context to enhance the flow of your essay.
Topic Sentences
Your topic sentences need improvement for clarity and directness. They should explicitly state the main idea of each paragraph.
Bad Sentence(s)
It is irrifutable that pollution becoming a major problem at glob level.
Corrected Sentence:
Pollution has become a global problem, underscoring the need for individual responsibility in its reduction.
Pollution has become a global problem, underscoring the need for individual responsibility in its reduction.
Consider specifying how this relates to individual responsibility and make it more direct.
Suggestions
Start each paragraph with a clear, concise statement that reflects the main idea. Use active voice and ensure it relates directly to the question.
Counter Points
Your essay lacks a clear handling of contrasting viewpoints. Including and effectively rebutting counterarguments could strengthen your position.
Bad Sentence(s)
Some people think that reducing pollution is only responsiblity of individual by their simple lifestyle.
Corrected Sentence:
While some argue that individuals can combat pollution solely through lifestyle changes, I believe broader systemic actions are also crucial.
While some argue that individuals can combat pollution solely through lifestyle changes, I believe broader systemic actions are also crucial.
Clarify and expand on this counterpoint before presenting your disagreement.
Suggestions
Introduce counterarguments early on and use them to frame your rebuttal. This not only shows awareness of differing views but also allows you to strengthen your argument by directly addressing and refuting these points.
Task Achievement
4 Bands
Your essay begins to address the task but falls short in fully answering the question and developing a coherent argument. There are grammatical errors and a lack of specific examples to support your position. Including a conclusion to summarize your stance and refining your argument with clear, supported points would improve your essay.
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Response to Question
You've started to address the question but didn't fully develop your argument or provide a clear stance throughout the essay.
Bad Example(s)
It is irrifutable that pollution becoming a major problem at glob level.
This sentence has grammatical errors and does not directly address the question.
Development of Position
Your position is mentioned, but the lack of development and supporting examples weakens your argument.
Bad Example(s)
I disagree with this notion and i will give some releted example to support my opinion.
This sentence promises argument development and examples that are not adequately provided or developed in the essay.
Supporting Details
The essay lacks concrete examples and supporting details to strengthen your argument.
Bad Example(s)
Some people think that reducing pollution is only responsiblity of individual by their simple lifestyle.
This statement is too general and lacks specific examples or evidence to support your disagreement.
Conclusion
Your essay does not include a conclusion, which is necessary to summarize your argument and reinforce your stance.
Lexical Resources
5.5 Bands
Your essay demonstrates a basic range of vocabulary suitable for the task, though there are some inaccuracies and misuses that affect clarity. Enhancing your lexical resource with varied vocabulary and paying attention to correct word usage would improve your score.
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Errors & Improvements
Based on the essay question, We have curated a list of suggested vocabulary that can improve the versatility of your writing skill. Utilise these words in your next essay to get your desired bands.
Lexical Mistakes
| Mistake | Correction | Reason |
|---|---|---|
| irrifutable | irrefutable | Spelling error. |
| glob level | global level | Incorrect phrase usage. |
| responsiblity | responsibility | Spelling error. |
| releted | related | Spelling error. |
Repeated Words
| Repeated Words | Alternative Words |
|---|---|
pollution 2 times | contamination, environmental damage |
individual 2 times | person, citizen |
Vocabulary Suggestions
| Word Phrase | Meaning |
|---|---|
| mitigate Make less severe, serious, or painful. | Make less severe, serious, or painful. |
| sustainable Able to be maintained at a certain rate or level. | Able to be maintained at a certain rate or level. |
| collective action Action taken together by a group of people whose goal is to enhance their status and achieve a common objective. | Action taken together by a group of people whose goal is to enhance their status and achieve a common objective. |
| ecological footprint A measure of human demand on the Earth's ecosystems. | A measure of human demand on the Earth's ecosystems. |
Grammatical Range
4.5 Bands
Your essay contains several grammatical errors, including misspellings, incorrect verb forms, and missing articles. These mistakes disrupt the flow and clarity of your writing. Focusing on sentence structure and proofreading could significantly improve your grammar.
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Sentence Structures
Your sentences lack variety and complexity. Most of them are simple and straightforward, which might not fully demonstrate your ability to construct complex ideas.
Bad Example(s)
It is irrifutable that pollution becoming a major problem at glob level.
This sentence is awkwardly phrased and lacks complexity. It also contains errors that disrupt its structure.
Tense Usage
Your use of tenses is mostly consistent, but there are instances where the tense does not match the context, affecting the clarity of your message.
Bad Example(s)
Some people think that reducing pollution is only responsiblity of individual by their simple lifestyle.
The tense is consistent, but the sentence structure and phrasing make the tense usage seem incorrect.
Grammatical Errors
It is irrifutable that pollution becoming a major problem at glob level.
Correction:
It is irrefutable that pollution is becoming a major problem at a global level.
It is irrefutable that pollution is becoming a major problem at a global level.
Misspelling of 'irrefutable', incorrect verb form 'becoming' without 'is', and 'glob' should be 'global' for correct context.
Some people think that reducing pollution is only responsiblity of individual by their simple lifestyle.
Correction:
Some people think that reducing pollution is only the responsibility of individuals through their simple lifestyles.
Some people think that reducing pollution is only the responsibility of individuals through their simple lifestyles.
Missing article 'the' before 'responsibility', 'responsiblity' is a typo, and 'individual' should be plural to match 'their'.